tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2851578678715572028.post8264101105701801334..comments2023-08-10T11:52:29.460-04:00Comments on Beyond Bread: Rally & Discussion to Save Franklin ShelterGreg Bloomhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08563081048614579716noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2851578678715572028.post-15256892909628726272008-09-07T22:45:00.000-04:002008-09-07T22:45:00.000-04:00Hi peregrine,Thanks for catching that and for taki...Hi peregrine,<BR/><BR/>Thanks for catching that and for taking the time to read the post. I hope the new language solves the problem.<BR/><BR/>MMatt Siemerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03692867983123213449noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2851578678715572028.post-12273335335637064392008-09-05T22:11:00.000-04:002008-09-05T22:11:00.000-04:00"In the morning there will be a rally to save Fran..."In the morning there will be a rally to save Franklin Shelter from being shut down, putting about 300 more homeless residents on the streets just as winter approaches."<BR/><BR/>This sentence states that the rally to save Franklin Shelter will put 300 more homeless residents on the streets just as winter approaches.<BR/><BR/>I suggest it be rewritten as follows:<BR/><BR/>"In the morning there will be a rally to save Franklin Shelter from being shut down, in the hopes of preventing about 300 more homeless residents being put out on the streets just as winter approaches."Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06457714973178622783noreply@blogger.com